The Friction
We kept reading drafts that began with a useful idea and ended in language that sounded important but said very little. The idea got padded with abstractions, borrowed phrases, and words designed to survive a meeting. By the end, the writer still knew what they meant, but the reader had been handed fog.
The problem is not that people are foolish or dishonest. Often they are trying to sound credible, soften a difficult point, or write in the dialect their workplace expects. The sentence gets safer while the idea gets harder to find.
The Experiment
We wondered whether a tool could point at vague language without turning into a smug red pen. The useful move is not merely saying, “This is jargon.” It is showing what the sentence appears to mean, where confidence outruns evidence, and how the same thought might be written clearly.
The experiment is really about trust: can critique rescue the idea instead of embarrassing the writer?
What Surprised Us
The worst phrases were rarely the whole problem. Usually they were symptoms of a missing decision: who is doing what, for whom, and why it matters. Once those questions were answered, much of the inflated language became unnecessary on its own.
Clarity turned out to be less about shrinking every sentence and more about making each sentence accountable for a real claim.
Workshop note: one sentence managed to include AI, synergy, transformational, and paradigm—and still forgot to explain what the software did.
What It Removes
It removes the friction between what you meant and what your reader understood.